Annie!
Your piece is coming along nicely. I have watched it a few times and here are the weaknesses that I see:
1. two areas of the piece are too reliant on large, unedited versions of your source materials. The advertisement in the beginning, which I love, but there is too much of it and it begins to knock everything else out of balance. Could you break up the clip? seems like the dog/cat search part and the talking boxer part are less necessary than the others. I am wondering if you split up the parts “two zillion people are sending emails” and then had a series of images/vids of cell phones/people dialing (that Nokia comm had some beautiful imagery) and then went to the next stat?? that may seem a bit more interesting and more mashed. As of now the advertisement bit at the beginning and the part with the social networking info are too unchanged.
Particularly with the social networking video part you could easily come up with different images. In fact it would be cool to see you and your friends in it somewhere. You could take screen shots via GRAB (application) and put your images/your sites, etc., in there as a substitute. Because that project was made in iMovie it seems strange to have a big unedited chunk of it in your piece. Also, you should use current statistics. You can find them online easily.
Let me know what you think. I am going into school at 10am and can let people into the lab if needed.
Hi Amy – THANKS for the feedback. It’s very helpful!
Yes, the commercial at the beginning can be broken up into different pieces. I cut some of it out already, but I will take more out and add some different imagery.
As for the social networking part, do you know how to take a “picture” of your computer screen? For instance – if I wanted to take a still picture and save it of my facebook back on the screen, how do I do that? I know there’s a way to do it without a digital camera but maybe not… either way, I’ll bring my camera in and play around with making a new part for that section with current statistics.
What do you think about the message/text in general? Does it make sense? What are you getting out of it as a first time viewer?
Thank you again – I’ll be in at some point to get into the lab and WORK! AAM
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May 6th, 2009 at 7:56 am
Annie!
Your piece is coming along nicely. I have watched it a few times and here are the weaknesses that I see:
1. two areas of the piece are too reliant on large, unedited versions of your source materials. The advertisement in the beginning, which I love, but there is too much of it and it begins to knock everything else out of balance. Could you break up the clip? seems like the dog/cat search part and the talking boxer part are less necessary than the others. I am wondering if you split up the parts “two zillion people are sending emails” and then had a series of images/vids of cell phones/people dialing (that Nokia comm had some beautiful imagery) and then went to the next stat?? that may seem a bit more interesting and more mashed. As of now the advertisement bit at the beginning and the part with the social networking info are too unchanged.
Particularly with the social networking video part you could easily come up with different images. In fact it would be cool to see you and your friends in it somewhere. You could take screen shots via GRAB (application) and put your images/your sites, etc., in there as a substitute. Because that project was made in iMovie it seems strange to have a big unedited chunk of it in your piece. Also, you should use current statistics. You can find them online easily.
Let me know what you think. I am going into school at 10am and can let people into the lab if needed.
May 6th, 2009 at 8:27 am
Hi Amy – THANKS for the feedback. It’s very helpful!
Yes, the commercial at the beginning can be broken up into different pieces. I cut some of it out already, but I will take more out and add some different imagery.
As for the social networking part, do you know how to take a “picture” of your computer screen? For instance – if I wanted to take a still picture and save it of my facebook back on the screen, how do I do that? I know there’s a way to do it without a digital camera but maybe not… either way, I’ll bring my camera in and play around with making a new part for that section with current statistics.
What do you think about the message/text in general? Does it make sense? What are you getting out of it as a first time viewer?
Thank you again – I’ll be in at some point to get into the lab and WORK! AAM
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